That just looked like a typical squaddies first weekend back.
Beat some chavs, drink beer, skull some more chavs get a kebab and if your lucky get a free shack in the cells. Free food in the morning...I'm sure they spit in the microwave all day breakfast but it all tastes the same anyway.
Fastmedic, I agree with you mate, but how about making it into an Inter Services competition ? Infantry, Marines and RAF Regt each send a company in and the unit with the most "scalps" win. Set up spectating areas with beer and scoff for the crowd and game on
Maybe you should change the story a bit, set it in Glasburgh with jockinese subtitles; also you could try try asking for ideas from the nice military people who inhabit the ARRSE site, I hear they love journo's and wannabe writers