Help needed in writing a chapter of my book.

The_Snail

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How about instead of some kind of trusty human sidekick, he has a talking car? Perhaps a really clever one
 
Be different and make him a former All Quaeda lieutenant who came to UK as a refugee and is now a trusted member of the security forces while running cells of like minded fellows via his mosque. And he should be black. And gay.
That way you can celebrate diversity, be multi culti right on etc etc
 
Perhaps 14 Int type secret unit "model" but apply it to the Middle East for your AQ angle.

RMP? They have CPU blokes who would be in ME doing attaché protection type stuff? Has your police angle (a bit jack reacher though).

There's also a US unit called the Intelligence Support Activity which has some interesting back stories to it. Shouldn't be hard to apply those to a fictitious British situation. Both of those units, being less "bangy" may be more likely to yield candidates like your police character?
 
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Perhaps 14 Int type secret unit "model" but apply it to the Middle East for your AQ angle.

RMP? They have CPU blokes who would be in ME doing attaché protection type stuff? Has your police angle (a bit jack reacher though).

There's also a US unit called the Intelligence Support Activity which has some interesting back stories to it. Shouldn't be hard to apply those to a fictitious British situation. Both of those units, being less "bangy" may be more likely to yield candidates like your police character?
I don't think the OP mentioned that the character was a copper? I still reckon he should be a PI, but perhaps a rookie cop before joining the army - that could give him a more plausible "history".
 
Be different and make him a former All Quaeda lieutenant who came to UK as a refugee and is now a trusted member of the security forces while running cells of like minded fellows via his mosque. And he should be black. And gay.
That way you can celebrate diversity, be multi culti right on etc etc
I like the way you're thinking. I think he should be a multi handicapped transgender lesbian too.
 
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Firstly I would like to add that I am hugely respectful of the armed forces. My grandad served in the army all over the globe in World War II, and my dad served in Northern Ireland and Germany.

I am writing a book that is basically about a detective. But in this particular chapter I want something defining to happen to him - like a call to action - which I want to occur when the character is serving in the army (character born in 1976) in 1998. I also want the character to be serving in some kind of special ops army unit capacity.

The most applicable setting I have found that I could add as the setting of this chapter is 1998 and the emergence of Al Qaeda. Perhaps my character could serve in some secret operation to bring down a fiction right hand man to Bin Laden in 1998?

Any insight or advice would be greatly appreciated.

Thanks.

(Obviously feel free to put this post in another area of the forum if I have posted incorrectly - thanks)
1998 saw the Desert Fox raids against Sadam's NBC capabilities, staged from by the RAF and USAF. RAF Tornado GR4s operated from UK bases in Saudi Arabia (Prince Sultan's Air BAse, al Kharj - incidentally, the home town of bin Laden's mother); Ali Al Salem in Kuwait, and from Muharraq in Bahrain. Foot print was 99% RAF; a handful of Royal Engineers, RLC posties, some CBRN specialists (in Kuwait).
 

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I can pruf red it if needud.
 

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To be honest, no one reads books anymore, lets just cut to the chase and write the screenplay adaption.

Scene 1.

Jack wakes up in a messy bedroom, you can see various sailor tats on his muscled torso, this is how we know he is ex Navy. There is a beautiful girl in bed with him. He gets up and quietly gets dressed as she sleeps, holstering his 9mm pistol which was on the bedside table.

She wakes up to see him walking out the door.

Girl: "When will I see you again?" (French or Eastern European accent)

Jack: "You won't."

He walks out the door and the scene cuts to him jumping on a cool as **** motorbike and speeding off, possibly popping a wheelie. (Might need to get a stunt man for this bit).

Scene 2.

There is a guy handcuffed to a chair in an abandoned warehouse. A single fluorescent tube is flickering and you can hear Timothy Spall on the phone.

Timothy Spall: "Listen I don't give a **** what Jonny said, I'm not ******* Jonny am I? Just bring him here alive alright?"

He slams the phone down and emerges from behind a desk. He turns the bloke handcuffed to the chair.

Timothy Spall: "I've just sent the Turk to get your brother, you might be less reluctant to tell me where the money is when he gets here."

The bloke starts to shake and twitch in his chair, visibly distressed. Timothy Spall, puts some classical music on and starts sharpening a big knife.
 

The_Snail

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To be honest, no one reads books anymore, lets just cut to the chase and write the screenplay adaption.

Scene 1.

Jack wakes up in a messy bedroom, you can see various sailor tats on his muscled torso, this is how we know he is ex Navy. There is a beautiful girl in bed with him. He gets up and quietly gets dressed as she sleeps, holstering his 9mm pistol which was on the bedside table.

She wakes up to see him walking out the door.

Girl: "When will I see you again?" (French or Eastern European accent)

Jack: "You won't."

He walks out the door and the scene cuts to him jumping on a cool as **** motorbike and speeding off, possibly popping a wheelie. (Might need to get a stunt man for this bit).

Scene 2.

There is a guy handcuffed to a chair in an abandoned warehouse. A single fluorescent tube is flickering and you can hear Timothy Spall on the phone.

Timothy Spall: "Listen I don't give a **** what Jonny said, I'm not ******* Jonny am I? Just bring him here alive alright?"

He slams the phone down and emerges from behind a desk. He turns the bloke handcuffed to the chair.

Timothy Spall: "I've just sent the Turk to get your brother, you might be less reluctant to tell me where the money is when he gets here."

The bloke starts to shake and twitch in his chair, visibly distressed. Timothy Spall, puts some classical music on and starts sharpening a big knife.
Sound track by Tony Ferrino.
 
I don't think the OP mentioned that the character was a copper? I still reckon he should be a PI, but perhaps a rookie cop before joining the army - that could give him a more plausible "history".
I read detective and made an assessment. If I didn't read detective, then I want a pay out if he/she writes one in
 

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The Turk is driving along in a blacked out Range Rover with two other big lads. They all look moody as **** and are smartly dressed. The Turk looks stereotypically Mediterranean, with a leather jacket, some bling jewellery and too much hair gel.

I know you can't smell movie scenes, but if you could it would reek of aftershave and stale fag smoke.

A young lad is walking down the street. The Turk nods and the meat heads in the back jump out of the Range Rover, grabbing the lad and bundling him into the back.

Meat head 1: "Mr Spall would like a word with you son."
 
But it looks like a civvy copter until it need to get all worry.
Sort of a Wolf in Sheep's clothing you could say.
You mean it would be a wolf of the air? interesting.... An alternative would be an advanced police helicopter which despite it's 'whisper mode' would be named something 'thunder' perhaps blue could be slipped into the title to link with the police?
 

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