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**hammy123** · 03-08-2009, 11:51

Originally Posted by Rudie

Originally Posted by Rapierman

For all of you slating it ,it is actually quite a good piece. Before you start it is obviously based on the "Sun" Red top approach to facts, however to write something in the style of another (and most definately far superior poet/writer) is no mean feat. To this end I believe personally it is pretty good. Be better with a more realistic outlook though.

Are you smoking crack? It's f ucking abismal.
A veteran wrote this? It sounds more like some whinging civvie trying to get adulation from soldiers.
Not only that,the poor deluded f ucker who posted it has gone into an internet strop when everyone slated it - f ucking priceless.

......and it's feckin abysmal not abismal - if your progressing a career as a literary critic then you need to brush up on your spelling.

**Manley** · 03-08-2009, 16:03

I thought it was a good take on the original by Rudyard Kipling, I give it a fair go.

**shortfuse** · 03-08-2009, 16:16

I didn't think it was possible to vomit the purest bile, whilst laughing hysterically, but after reading that utter f ucking drivel I have found it to be so.

It's the first "poem" I've ever read that has given me a twisted hernia and burst several capillaries in my right eye.

No, make that the second, Killaloes f ucking dirge made my small intestine rupture into my pants where it hung like an angry red wasps nest in my gusset.

**jarrod248** · 03-08-2009, 16:19

Originally Posted by shortfuse

I didn't think it was possible to vomit the purest bile, whilst laughing hysterically, but after reading that utter f ucking drivel I have found it to be so.

It's the first "poem" I've ever read that has given me a twisted hernia and burst several capillaries in my right eye.

No, make that the second, Killaloes f ucking dirge made my small intestine rupture into my pants where it hung like an angry red wasps nest in my gusset.

Calm down Shorty it'll soon be Christmas.

**Biscuits_AB** · 03-08-2009, 16:36

He's right though. It's a sh*t poem.

**Greengrass** · 03-08-2009, 16:50

Sh*t frankly drivel posted by a tit. The type of rubbish often spouted by civis and blokes ashamed of the pi.ss poor service record.

**filthyphil** · 04-08-2009, 05:32

It's "Tommy this an' that",
Until it makes yer fcukin' cringe,
From readin' crappy doggerel
That stinks like Dale's m!nge.

**auscam** · 04-08-2009, 06:36

Keep the OP away from Nanuq, please God...

**auscam** · 04-08-2009, 06:39

Originally Posted by hammy123

Originally Posted by Rudie

Originally Posted by Rapierman

For all of you slating it ,it is actually quite a good piece. Before you start it is obviously based on the "Sun" Red top approach to facts, however to write something in the style of another (and most definately far superior poet/writer) is no mean feat. To this end I believe personally it is pretty good. Be better with a more realistic outlook though.

Are you smoking crack? It's f ucking abismal.
A veteran wrote this? It sounds more like some whinging civvie trying to get adulation from soldiers.
Not only that,the poor deluded f ucker who posted it has gone into an internet strop when everyone slated it - f ucking priceless.

......and it's feckin abysmal not abismal - if your progressing a career as a literary critic then you need to brush up on your spelling.

It's 'you're'.

**Big_Duke_Six** · 04-08-2009, 07:10

Originally Posted by verticalgyro

Originally Posted by Big_Duke_Six

Whatever you think of the sentiment; the construction, scansion and rhyming scheme all seem spot on, without referring back to the original.

Nevertheless, there already is an active thread on this here. It already has several updates of Kipling and many other war poets, with various degress of success.

BD6

What utter tripe. I'm a professional poet and in my opinion, the poem here is shite.

With respect to your profession and your opinion, now that I have referred back to the original, it cannot be denied that he has constructed the poem in the same style and shape, albeit with one fewer stanza. He has also used the same scansion, rhythm and the same rhyming scheme as Kipling did. The poem may be shite, but my observations are not tripe.